Pobble 5/05/2020
It came from the sea, calmly at first. An enormous animal came from the sea and hit the town. Everyone was running away from the big creature, the giant creature broke the roof of a building everywhere it was getting flooded. The creature came from the deep ocean, the creature was looking for something so the creature was busting all the building down. Then, as more and more people came, and shrieks and cries of alarm filled the air, the creature became angry. So the creature decided to bust down more buildings, the strong big creature that came from the was getting angrier because the hips of people were escaping from the creature. As the people were escaping the strong big creature took people away from escaping. In an almighty tangle of limbs and water and buildings and people, the beast came violently exploding out of the frothing water. The strong big creature was making big waves and high sapless. The strong big creature was like a beast.The strong big creature has big arms it has 6 arms and on legs.
Hi Reiko, my name is Keti, I really liked you story but maybe you could think of putting paragraphs in them and looking at the last sentence. I think in that last sentence you could of used a comma when it came to, big arms. It should go like, The strong big creature has big arms, it also has 6 arms and one leg.
ReplyDeleteOk Keti,thank you for commenting on my blog,and thank you for some add vice.
DeleteHi my name is Lanisi and I just wanted to say that I liked your story and that I like that you used enormous in your story.
ReplyDeleteHi Reiko
ReplyDeleteI like your story about the sea creature and that you used interesting words to describe the sea creature. Remember to check your writing because your last sentence said six arms and on legs
Hi reiko, i really liked your story it was really good, was nice and had a lot of describing words. Maybe next time you could add paragraphs and commas. Other then that, your story was great keep the work up. Have a good day.
ReplyDeletePhotographs? did you meant.
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